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Post by fireheart on Mar 7, 2008 10:58:05 GMT -5
It was a cold winters evening and Tarin was siting underneath the old oak his bow lay beside him he caught a glimpse of what seemed to be a fox but was not it was a deers buttocks he grabbed his bow and shot at the deer but the deer ran in to the darker deeper part of the forest that was haunted by spirits he. Green and shiny grass blades left his new boots wet but he had to get that deer for the sake of boar clan. Walking fast the deer stopped, he stood with his bow clutched in his hands pulling quickly at a bow from his quiver. Tarin shot again at the deer but it disappeared into thin air. Tarin wondered curiously to the spot the deer was on suddenly something grabbed him he was shocked to see that a dark slimy hand pulled him under the ground.
IS IT GOOD
COMMENT BACK PLEASE
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Post by SheWolfAtSoul on Mar 7, 2008 15:01:02 GMT -5
it is good, I think you need to proof read it though. I'd like to read more
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Post by fireheart on Mar 8, 2008 9:22:47 GMT -5
thanks
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Post by Whitefang on Mar 8, 2008 15:26:34 GMT -5
it's good.
whats proof read?
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Post by SheWolfAtSoul on Mar 9, 2008 16:30:31 GMT -5
just read through it and cheack spellings and grammar.
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Post by Whitefang on Mar 15, 2008 13:56:10 GMT -5
Ah...right.
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